How to Analyze Like Fitzgerald — Template Part IV

This entry is part 4 of 5 in the series SAT Essay Template

So far we’ve learned that deep analysis avoids claim and summary as much as possible.

If you make a claim, then you have to tell us WHY you believe that. Back it up with examples and reasoning. Furthermore, you have to tell us so what if it’s true? In other words, why should we care? If you make a summary, you have to tell us the purpose or role of that summary in your overall argument. Again, tell us what your point is.

One of the telltale signs of weak writing is the repetition of the same claim in different words. Take, for example, an essay trying to argue for saving our planet by placing stricter regulations on pollution output.

A weak writer might say something like:

Pollution is bad. Not only does it hinder our breathing, but it also hurts the world. We will not have a place for our children at the current rate of pollution, so pollution is a serious concern. We must pass laws to ensure that factories, cars, and other pollutant-producing agents do not continue to harm our planet. If we stop pollution, then we can have a clean, safe earth to enjoy.

Think long and hard about what that paragraph actually said. In a nutshell, it told us in no less than five ways that pollution is bad and that we need to stop it. Every sentence is a claim. Not once did this writer explain WHY he feels pollution is bad or HOW it is hurting our world. You might think that saying pollution hinders our breathing is analysis, but it’s not. It doesn’t explain HOW pollution hinders breathing. (He needs to discuss that pollution damages the ability of our lungs to filter air, which in turn, makes breathing difficult. Don’t ASSUME this is obvious, even if it is. Your job as a writer is to make things explicitly clear.)

Sure, this writer claims that we won’t have a place for our children with such high levels of pollution, but did he explain why not? No. He expects the reader to make the connection himself: pollution leads to the destruction of our ecosystem, which leads to an impoverished earth with little natural resources left for our children. This writer completely omitted that crucial link, that critical middle step that connects his claim to true analysis.

He is betting his readers already agree that pollution is damaging the world, so he is in effect, singing to the choir. But what happens if his reader is the pro-factory businessman who argues that stopping pollution means kissing your iPhones and fancy laptops goodbye? Maybe the truth is we need some pollution in order to advance our world technologically.

Here’s how I would go about fixing things:

Pollution is a serious threat to the future well-being of our planet because pollution has produced a toxic imbalance in our ecosystem. As factories pump out millions of pounds of poisonous gases each year, the earth’s protective ozone layer continues to erode. In turn, the weakened ozone shield permits damaging radiation waves to infiltrate our world. While the radiation may seem subtle and slow-acting, a look at the last ten years reveals a much different story. In South America, the radiation caused by pollution has killed off thousands of acres of natural forests. Without sustainable vegetation for herbivores to consume, the animal population has dwindled tremendously. As a result, the carnivores were also left scrambling for food without scarcely any prey, the herbivores, remaining. Ultimately, pollution has snuffed out countless life forms that depend upon one another.

Furthermore, pollution has adversely impacted natural processes that living organisms need to survive. Normally, plants are able to convert sun energy into essential sugar, but the increased radiation has actually impeded photosynthesis from occurring altogether in certain plant species. This leads to widespread plant death, which not only affects the plants, but also the animals that depend on them for sustenance. Moreover, the loss of plant life means there are fewer plants to filter out toxic carbon dioxide gases and to give off life-sustaining oxygen, both standard processes that have been ravaged by pollution. With its long, damaging domino effect, pollution is an assault on all life, so we must enact safeguards to curb the crisis on our world.

Notice the difference here. I actually explain HOW pollution damages our world by describing how pollution ripped a hole in the ozone layer, which allowed radiation to enter our atmosphere, which in turn destroyed vegetation and animals. I explain that because of pollution, the entire ecosystem has lost its balance. I even describe how radiation caused by pollution hinders photosynthesis, but I didn’t stop there. Because so what if photosynthesis stops? I actually take it all the way home by saying that photosynthesis failure means the death of animals, loss of CO2 filters, and decrease of life-sustaining oxygen production. Only after ALL of that do I make a final summary claim, but even this final summary claim explains HOW pollution hurts us (it creates a long chain effect of damage).

Deep analysis follows a simple structure:
          Claim        →          How/Why?        →        So What/Who Cares?
Summary         →          So What/Who Cares?


  • Claim: Pollution is bad.
  • How/Why (is it bad?): It created hole in ozone layer, which allowed radiation to enter and kill off plants, which killed off animals. Radiation caused by pollution also hindered photosynthesis, which stopped CO2/O2 exchange.
  • So What/Who Cares?: So if we don’t stop pollution, our world is going to crap.

Remember, the summary is where you simply describe what happened. A summary does not tell us why this detail or event is important. Therefore, you MUST tell us the reason you wanted us to know about this detail or event, this summary. You must tell us the role/purpose of your summary. In other words, the so what/who cares.


Classify the following as 1) claim, 2) summary, or 3) analysis.

  1. Parents who shelter their children are doing a service by protecting these kids from harsh experiences that may permanently emotionally scar them.
  2. The most successful people in life are those who can identify and leverage the skills of others rather than those who learn to possess such skills themselves.
  3. Sharing knowledge and working as a team is more effective than working as an individual.
  4. The bee colony exhibits a remarkable team effort in which no individual bee survives alone; each bee is part of a hive mind.
  5. This hive mind allows individuals of the colony to share experiences, skills, and knowledge, thereby creating a stronger unit.
  6. Competition with rivals incentivizes people to work faster and harder.

Write your own analysis for the following claims on another sheet of paper:

  1. It is important to obey authority.
  2. Competition rather than collaboration is a more effective motivator and results producer.
  3. The journey to achieving a result is more important than the accomplishment itself.

Good luck, friends!

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